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The Heros (Free verse) by madjack2 We are the heros,
The champions of fate,
Down to the marrow,
We do not
give in to hate.
We are the protectors,
The keepers of hope,
Fighting
the destroyers,
Helping men to cope.
We are the kings,
First born sons
of man,
Holding together the rings,
Keeping peace where we can.
The
time has com,
To lay all on the line,
All else we will shun,
None will
be left behind.
For peace and love
We have walked many roads,
Blessed
by heaven above,
Down the many paths we've strode.
We are the champions,
In twilights breath,
We are the heros,
Until the world's death.
Up the ladder:
You'll Never Hear
Down the ladder:
Midnight Madness
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.102041
Posted: March 16, 2002 1:17 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:17 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.102041 Overall Rank: 6028 Comments:
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anonymous @
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30-Jun-01/2:05 PM
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sounds like you have a highlander nype thing in mind. Or else I've compeltely missed the reference. One spelling error "com". The wording is pretty rich, but the reference is vague.
somehow all my mind will wrap around is this picture of heavy metal mayhem, screaming guitars and thumping bass, the pounding of drums powerful in a flash of bright against the stormy sky... go figure?...
sacrificed rhythm for rhyme.
Wow! This is like my favorite Queen song ever!
who are you? clearly, heroes, champions, protectors, keepers, kings.... but, who are you? until i know... you get an 0.
I would tell you to work on this a little more. I have a feeling that with some polishing and a few changes in word choice it could be a better piece. The formating is all jumbled. I would like to see 'stronger' language, since this is about strength, heroes, and such.
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