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You'll Never Hear (Concrete) by confuzdlilgirl
Does it matter what I say Or even what I wear Does it matter which way If both lead me there Do you notice I won't say What I really want to hear Do you even know you make my day When you don't make me tear Did you know that you light my way When everything is darkening near Did you know my smile will stay If you only take my fear Would you if I said you may Ask me to be and I would think you dear Why is it with my heart you play Yet tell me I'm all you wish to hear Why cant you simply say I want you always here I wish you understood my way OF how with you I fear Why is it you wont come my way You wont even come near Why is it words I wish to say Are the words you'll never hear

Up the ladder: The Enslaver of Men
Down the ladder: The Heros

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.117647
Weighted score: 5.1036234
Overall Rank: 6029
Posted: November 5, 2002 3:18 PM PST; Last modified: November 5, 2002 3:18 PM PST
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[5] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.188.228 | 5-Nov-02/3:25 PM | Reply
It's good to feel, but don't let it consume you. Walk with us, slowly, and you'll be fine. Both pieces are emotionally saturated. You have pattern and rythm though, something I struggle for. 5/5
[n/a] confuzdlilgirl @ 12.75.147.132 > INTRANSIT | 5-Nov-02/7:16 PM | Reply
what do you mean walk with us. sorry im not very good at these hidden message things. what does emotionally saturated mean??
[4] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 5-Nov-02/5:24 PM | Reply
because you taste like flat soda in a sock...quite frankly.4.???
[n/a] confuzdlilgirl @ 12.75.147.132 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 5-Nov-02/7:14 PM | Reply
I dont really get that comment but thats ok. this poem though you should know is not about me. its about a friend. wrote it to make her feel better. but thanx or the rating!!
[2] hipster flare @ 209.68.74.214 | 1-Oct-03/9:50 AM | Reply
Oh yeah, that's concrete. looks like a jagged edged something.
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