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ALONE (Other) by NewbieMe Alone, that's how it feels
As tears roll down my cheek
As I hold my tongue by my teeth
As I stop my breath so not to speak the loneliness I feel within
Alone, should I be?
When facing every problem that comes?
When things do not make sense at all?
When life's reality is too hard for me to ignore?
Alone, that's how it goes
In order for me to grow
In order for me to be strong
In order for me to know that in this life, sooner or later, I'll be on
my own
Up the ladder:
Dilemma of a Crip
Down the ladder:
Ode to poetandknowit
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Posted: November 9, 2002 3:28 AM PST; Last modified: November 9, 2002 3:28 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.663823 Overall Rank: 12260 Comments:
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Roisin @ 62.64.140.43
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9-Nov-02/6:43 AM
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This wonderfully encaptures the harsh truth in life, those that face the fact that we are all independant and alone are far stronger than those that have a herd mentality, finding strength in others. I like the way the poem moves from before this realisation to this realisation.
Nice subject matter and I like the way you question yourself. I really think that you worked to hard to confine your thoughts to your 4 line stanza. Let those thoughts run free.
Well i have to say this is good i have a poem by the same title
keep writin it suits u 133 view(s)
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