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ALONE (Other) by NewbieMe

Alone, that's how it feels As tears roll down my cheek As I hold my tongue by my teeth As I stop my breath so not to speak the loneliness I feel within Alone, should I be? When facing every problem that comes? When things do not make sense at all? When life's reality is too hard for me to ignore? Alone, that's how it goes In order for me to grow In order for me to be strong In order for me to know that in this life, sooner or later, I'll be on my own

thepinkbunnyofdoom 22-Feb-03/9:19 AM
Nice subject matter and I like the way you question yourself. I really think that you worked to hard to confine your thoughts to your 4 line stanza. Let those thoughts run free.




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