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Free verse № 2425

The Deep Dark Light

Member since 2002 · Posted 25 May 2002 · 1 comment

Before you sleep, dream of the fields you left behind, the deserts you never felt, you wilderness you yearned for, and keep that locked inside your heart, just for you, and every now and then, hearken back for the briefest of moments, just to taste what you wish you always had, and what you wished, like a locket around your neck.

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[6] Jill Stockinger 14-Jul-02/3:11 PM Reply
one spelling error (You wilderness you yearned for?). Also- mixed
metaphors, don't work together- taste what you wanted and a locket around your neck? Needs work.