fading

Member since 2002 · Posted 1 Nov 2002 · 2 comments

We're enveloped by darkness As daylight buckles, breaks, and fades Under the weight of the rising moon. I develop a false sense of security, With the steady rhythm of your breath, Of your heart. Your presence is heavy. I drown in your smell. Why don't you to stay here a while? (forever) How can I sleep? I'm living a dream.

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[1] <~> 4-Nov-02/8:43 AM Reply

hoe could you have wasted this potential: :Why don't you to stay here a while?
(forever)"

arg.

[6] god'swife 4-Nov-02/2:25 PM Reply

I don't understand the title. Nothing here seems to be fading. Read your other 2, and I get the feeling your not jumping in. Just wandering around the perimeter. This is the strongest and most invested of the 3. I especially can relate to the last 2 lines, but somehow the last line feels overly dramatic in a cheesy sort of way.