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All Alone (Free verse) by Normo All alone
By myself
Staring at your picture
Upon the shelf
Wishing we
Weren't apart
Holding you close to me
Sans broken heart
But alas
In my heart
I know we are destined
To be apart
Up the ladder:
Lasting Forever
Down the ladder:
a haiku for all you traditionalists, and after you're done reading it you can eat my shorts
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Posted: November 1, 2002 1:18 AM PST; Last modified: November 1, 2002 1:18 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.6926384 Overall Rank: 12038 Comments:
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Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200
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1-Nov-02/1:26 AM
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There's a nice sense of inevitability, but I'm not sure if the simplicity of the verse structure works here.
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