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TONIGHT (Free verse) by adrenalize
Tonight the rain is falling But Ive run out of tears Because crying in the rain Never does take away the pain Tonight I am thinking about you Do I ever figure in your memory So what category do I belong to Difficult, bad mistake or who? Tonight I stand among people termed as friends Yet I feel like a stranger in town Have you ever felt that way Or you still dont understand anything I say Tonight everything seems in equilibrium Everything that is except me But then that would be asking too much Always did have the restless streak in me Tonight Im going to turn things around Had enough of wasting time Of trying to wait for things to happen Because you never were my number one Tonight Im going to find myself someone who loves me Like I tried to love you And soon youll just be like a distant star Millions of light years away

Up the ladder: DID YOU EVER?
Down the ladder: Obstacle In Between

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.4285715
Weighted score: 4.577378
Overall Rank: 12591
Posted: October 30, 2002 2:15 PM PST; Last modified: October 30, 2002 2:15 PM PST
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[6] Katie @ 65.56.79.145 | 30-Oct-02/6:24 PM | Reply
I think the first stanza would sound better like this: Tonight the rain is falling
But Iv run out of tears
Because crying in the rain
Never makes the pain disappear, it's just a thought, and I think maybe if you go through this poem one more time, and try to clean it up some, it would be a beautiful poem! But other than that, I must say I like it =)
[n/a] adrenalize @ 202.141.237.5 > Katie | 31-Oct-02/6:23 AM | Reply
Hey Katie.......Thank u for ur comments.....Well I know it needs some polishing but I had 2 free hours and so decided to utilise em by writing a poem and so its kindda raw I admit
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