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betsy's hands (Free verse) by onepinksock
If she came cloaked in darkness, moonlight washing only her hands, . these fingers grow like stalks swaying from a solid trunk sprouting from a base where children jumped ship and hid from monsters. . Find them curled in rage waiting to explode not on face, but on mounds of clay and spinning liquid string glass from shape shifting dreams. . Clasped like prayer without words, betsy's hands fold for keeping angels warm, asleep on her palms.

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.7310586
Overall Rank: 11791
Posted: October 29, 2002 12:14 PM PST; Last modified: October 29, 2002 12:14 PM PST
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[7] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 30-Oct-02/1:35 AM | Reply
Evocative, especially the stuff about clay and glass.
[10] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 12-Jan-03/1:30 PM | Reply
i have a rule against the word angel in poetry, but this is a masterful piece..have a 10.
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