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Icon (Free verse) by timfowler
I see a picture behind glass: silvered sheet halo, eyes raging indigo and kindling fires that catch the falling angel, wings failing, spun air and gold. I feel the artist's hand exposed in tiny details: lives and faces, forgotten faces in distant crowds. Touches of illuminating flame bring a second's grace, floating. I believe there is light concealed trapped by pigment, egg-bound colouring the image, the purity of mother and child made a lie, mere creation, flesh and wood.

Up the ladder: Street Me
Down the ladder: Through the eyes of life

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.2689414
Overall Rank: 13168
Posted: May 20, 2002 1:07 PM PDT; Last modified: May 20, 2002 1:07 PM PDT
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[6] deleted user @ 206.180.235.23 | 21-May-02/1:15 AM | Reply
I hate to repeat myself, but the last two lines don't seem to carry through the theme, but introduce two entirely new ones (purity, mother and child) that aren't explored very much. It feels like a sudden change of direction right before the end.
[n/a] timfowler @ | 22-May-02/5:45 AM | Reply
I thought people might realise that an Icon very often features the Madonna and Child and therefore wouldnt regard it as a "new" subject
[n/a] timfowler @ | 22-May-02/5:47 AM | Reply
Thanks for your kind comments: if the poem leaves you feeling unsatisfied I'm kind of glad, since its trying to express feelings of deep personal dissatisfaction: there *is* no neat conclusion or end to the argument: thats the point.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.245.180 | 2-Jun-02/12:29 PM | Reply
This poeme reminds me of very olde poemes that were written many years ago. Do you like writing olde poetry?
[n/a] timfowler @ | 3-Jun-02/1:25 AM | Reply
Well I'd least I'd know a good poem if walked up and punched me, unlike yourself. Have a nice day.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.245.180 | 4-Jun-02/3:31 PM | Reply
Keep telling yourself that, my child.
[0] beakism @ 213.123.43.19 | 9-Jun-02/1:58 PM | Reply
This poem reminds me of the shit I took last week.
[4] Angel_of_fait @ 209.33.176.48 | 9-Jul-02/7:35 PM | Reply
Hi dark_angel has ranked my poems and i have had my poems published in books and i have won an award for my poetry i am only 14 but i do kno a good poem when i see one and i must say i agree with dark_angel this is a old fashion poem it needs more life some parts are boring but you will do better poet's allways have there flukes...
[3] Red_is_life @ 212.219.59.126 | 15-Jul-02/2:59 AM | Reply
Good choice of subject matter.
[3] Holden @ 195.92.67.67 | 23-Jul-02/7:24 AM | Reply
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