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Fields of Deception (Free verse) by rick
Content in our slavery We're taught The roots of heritage belong to the land Unwittingly exploited We smile Our hunger satisified By poisonous crops Deceived believers We obey Harvesting ideals Planted by television Gods With soil stained hands We give Donating time and money That was never ours Until fields lay empty Frozen roots Sleep in an earthen prison Finally we are free

Up the ladder: Midnight
Down the ladder: Mirth

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.4444444
Weighted score: 4.2222223
Overall Rank: 13210
Posted: October 23, 2002 5:51 PM PDT; Last modified: October 23, 2002 5:51 PM PDT
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[7] muffin @ 4.21.197.242 | 23-Oct-02/9:40 PM | Reply
I love it. I felt every line, it seems you put your sol into it. I would love to know your inspiration for this one?
[n/a] rick @ 24.53.9.111 > muffin | 24-Oct-02/6:14 AM | Reply
Thanks for your kind words... I wrote this (and just about everything else) while I was in college. I had just read Huxley's Brave New World and was bitter about being a slave to society.
[2] god'swife @ 209.179.136.111 | 24-Oct-02/8:10 PM | Reply
The last stanza is too obscure. So is everything else. I think I know what your talking about only because you're so vague you could be talking about a lot of things. Including my own personal belief. You sound of restraint, not hollow, but not hallowed. Make sense?
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