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#12 (Haiku) by mikejedw elm, undulating
beneath the over lit sky--
Jersey City night
Up the ladder:
Noblesse Oblige
Down the ladder:
To those who'd share their heartfelt feelings with the world
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Posted: May 14, 2002 10:18 PM PDT; Last modified: May 14, 2002 10:18 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.476287 Overall Rank: 2832 Comments:
nicely done once again
this is one sexy summer night poem.
over-lit, I think.
doesn't do enough for me, though it does seem to be a start, the more I ponder on it. I think undulating may be less descriptive of the jersey city night than befits its number of syllables. But I really don't have any suggestions--just my reaction. 147 view(s)
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elm, undulating ...