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Free verse № 19362

Charcoal haven

Member since 2001 · Posted 8 Oct 2002 · 1 comment

When the forest burns When the apples spit When the garden's black Still i tend to it. When the mother lies When the father dies When the child cries Still nothing changes. No hope to salvage I strolled along Silently starving By my own choice. I feel new bark soon I feel renewed now I taste sweet fruit, that nourishes me. But to stay in this tree But to stay in its shade But to live off its treasures I must leave my charcoal haven.

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[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 10-Nov-02/6:18 PM Reply
this is the mad russian witches choice of the evening when it comes to tap water filtering devices we should all leave our charcoal havens behind..here's a 10. use it to house train a puppy, or to save the planet if you'd like.??