Another poem

Member since 2002 · Posted 5 Oct 2002 · 3 comments

everything is the same nothin actually changed there was a littel cut in my finger that no one would notice,not even me but i can feel it,just a littel cut but it hurts so much when u look at the surface everything is so perfect but when u take a another look and get a littel bit closer u know something is wrong i dunno what it is but i can't feel that potential that used to lay down deep inside my words, suddenly all those words seems so shallow so fake and not real that they don't reveal,what i really feel it doesn't touch my heart when i read it and it doesn't make me cry it's just a nother poem another life and another end

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[2] muffin 23-Oct-02/8:18 PM Reply

Spelling mistakes and typographical errors should not be made on a piece that is being submitted on the internet. I kinda like the concept but words aren't as vivid as they could be. You need to be a little (sp) stronger in the middle of the poem.

[8] -=SeTTle=- 27-Oct-02/6:40 PM Reply

This is like meta-angst. Pretty interesting stuff.

[4] horus8 16-Jan-03/9:27 PM Reply

here once again we have mutant x doing everything but mutating. do not attempt to read this shite at home children..it may cause temporary drooling and tart walking.