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Spring Haiku (Haiku) by Staika
You tear at my eyes like a heron spearing fish in the cold spring dusk
Up the ladder: Carry You Inside
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.7777777
Weighted score: 5.740891
Overall Rank: 1816
Posted: May 12, 2002 1:57 AM PDT; Last modified: May 12, 2002 1:57 AM PDT
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[1]... anonymous @ 204.245.176.100 | 14-May-02/3:04 PM | Reply
this is great. - aduren
[4] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.101 | 22-May-02/5:26 AM | Reply
Nice one! I love the use of the words "spring" and "dusk". I've never seen those in a poem before!
[7] Jill Stockinger @ 209.162.37.68 | 14-Jul-02/2:43 PM | Reply
Tear and spear don't work as
being analagous enough, for me.
Jill S. I LOVE "like a heron spearing fish in the cold spring dusk."
[8] Robert K Foster @ 209.68.64.69 | 17-Sep-02/7:30 AM | Reply
effective simile. good show.
[7] halofriendly @ 4.159.131.212 | 21-Apr-04/5:59 PM | Reply
VERY good imagery
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