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white whale (Free verse) by ThePariahDog what's an ahab to do?
hot to trot on the beach
salt crusting my mouth
baked and begging to take a stab at whale tail
harpoon in hand, i make a splash
diving down to the floor
an ocean undulating, feet flailing wildly
i breach the surface then gasp for air
unable to fight for long, the calf relents
writhing in a pool of her own fluids
she shudders, closing her eyes
sated by the bloodless death
Up the ladder:
Rebecca, by Firelight
Down the ladder:
Escape
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Posted: May 15, 2010 2:41 PM PDT; Last modified: May 15, 2010 2:41 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.119203 Overall Rank: 5876 Comments:
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Dovina @ 68.183.220.26
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1-Aug-10/5:56 PM
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Some people think that Moby Dick is about a man after a whale. Im glad to see that you see more than that in it.
nice sex/hunt Ahab
Odd. Try getting more comments by submitting it to: http://ednaspoetrysite.proboards.com ? I would if I were you...
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