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white whale (Free verse) by ThePariahDog

what's an ahab to do? hot to trot on the beach salt crusting my mouth baked and begging to take a stab at whale tail harpoon in hand, i make a splash diving down to the floor an ocean undulating, feet flailing wildly i breach the surface then gasp for air unable to fight for long, the calf relents writhing in a pool of her own fluids she shudders, closing her eyes sated by the bloodless death

Edna Sweetlove 24-Sep-10/4:51 AM
Odd. Try getting more comments by submitting it to: http://ednaspoetrysite.proboards.com ? I would if I were you...




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