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Time to leap (Free verse) by hobojo
As I lay
I drift
and remember currents flowing
the sounds heard
of nature unwound
and emotions sour melting
smiles
glances, caught
in memory forever
created
together and yet so far
musical attempts
imagined or so real?
do I only see
what I want to be there?
And this is my time
to shed habits
to grow
just jump
from the cliff
do not fear what lies below
just me
alone
but better than an unwanted place
better to wait for
that place
its possible
I'll never reach
the destination planned
but settle no more
you dam fool
do not look back
so far have you come
be proud
keep going
leap!
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.5
Weighted score: 5.1185646
Overall Rank: 5961
Posted: August 11, 2008 11:55 PM PDT; Last modified: August 11, 2008 11:55 PM PDT
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Some capitalization and punctuation wouldn't hurt either, but it's not absolutely necessary.