Repetive displays of title are annoying. Unneccesary capitalization irritates my savage soul.

I'm going to reshape this, since I feel that this peice possesses substance worthy of salvation:


-Redemption on the mat.-

I watch as he sits alone
on the last chair, hands clasped
behind his bowed head-- body drenched
with sweat, hair disheveled, struggling
painfully to catch his breath.

He left the mat without his pride,
without victory, the confidence
he had stepping in manifestly absent.

He started the match
in the best shape of his life,
brawnier now than ever.
He started out strong, then
at the end he just froze.

Should have won, but he didn't,
having not done his best.
He allowed arrogance to hold sway,
failing to utilize the depths
of his skills and training.

Wiping away the tears he sighs,
sucking in the shame, knowing that
he will never forget this failure.

This lesson has prepared him;
his opponent will know of it
the next time he steps on the mat,
and feel the pain of past mistakes.
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Here's a six for conjuring up something worth writing.

SuperDreamer has done you well. Ideas are better than poetry, so you've got the good part done