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What you wana hang out later? (Sestina) by T. Jonathron Remp
What you got a reason to tie me in a knot? What you got five reasons to tell me I'm not The one What you go and have fun with your friends without me? What you had a raised pool party and didn't invite me? What you got a new job and didn't tell me the most direct route from where I'm stayin with my uncle What you got a new boyfriend and think you all that What you leave me like a flat on the highway What you need is a smack on the eyeball Hit me up later or i'll call

Down the ladder: Dry tears

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Arithmetic Mean: 1.0
Weighted score: 4.523188
Overall Rank: 12749
Posted: July 25, 2008 12:15 AM PDT; Last modified: July 25, 2008 12:15 AM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] Tyler J. Mancini @ 71.85.145.48 | 25-Jul-08/12:20 AM | Reply
What you need to figure out the correct form of a sestina. fail.
[n/a] T. Jonathron Remp @ 127.0.0.1 > Tyler J. Mancini | 12-Dec-16/12:20 PM | Reply
Have you never heard of an ITALIAN Sestina? Total idiot
[4] amanda_dcosta @ 82.178.136.146 | 25-Jul-08/4:24 AM | Reply
Am left wondering what this 'what you' is about ...
[n/a] T. Jonathron Remp @ ::1 > amanda_dcosta | 12-Dec-16/12:19 PM | Reply
Why? Are you intellectually diminished?
[0] Don-Quixote @ 76.254.27.93 | 29-Jul-08/5:33 PM | Reply
Um. Why did you think I wanted to read about your silly failed attempt at loving? You know why she left? It wasn't your loving-- It was your obsessin.

Zero.
[n/a] T. Jonathron Remp @ 127.0.0.1 > Don-Quixote | 12-Dec-16/12:19 PM | Reply
No, it was my loving. You're not very smart
[0] Edna Sweetlove @ 85.211.243.48 | 5-Aug-08/8:29 AM | Reply
Illiterate tripe.
[n/a] T. Jonathron Remp @ ::1 > Edna Sweetlove | 12-Dec-16/12:20 PM | Reply
I don't want to hear about your lunch
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