close to you and can't be still

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 May 2002 · 2 comments

close to you and can't be still have to hum around you are the swing you are the spin the sky rolls and the clouds are ground and everything unfastened rains down you keep me on my feet dancing inside my shoes singing into my hands billboards that's what i want postage stamps that's what i have

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[3] yarlgrenn 14-May-02/2:16 PM Reply

I am intrigued by the last stanza, but the first couple of lines (of first stanza) kill it for me.

[8] deleted user 26-Jun-02/1:55 AM Reply

I don't get the last stanza, but the rest is great. The first stanza has a wonderful rhythm.