Caveat

Member since 2003 · Posted 10 Oct 2006 · 2 comments

I'm not who I am I'm not who I'll be I'm not who you think I am I'm not who you see Once every morning And twice before bed I empty the old Emptiness from my head Constantly you'll find me Just pacing 'bout my room Wandering and wondering 'Bout what you must assume I give to you this caveat In moments of distress That though you know me now You know not me unless You see I'm not who I am And I'm not who I'll be I'm not who you think I am And I'm not who you see

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[7] Dovina 10-Oct-06/1:43 PM Reply

It's the kind of thing that needs a steady rhythm to carry it. Mostly, you've done that, but Verse 2, for example, might go like this or somesuch:

Once every morning
And twice before bed
I empty the old
thoughts from my head
Always you'll find me
Just pacing my room
Wandering and wondering
About what you think

[8] drnick 11-Oct-06/11:49 AM Reply

nice rhythem, but I think Dovina is right...pretty good otherwise.