Free verse № 145500
Pane Glass Lake
This sanctuary is where I discovered,
melancholy memories of fargone
fields. But where fieldside is much
less lakeside, I'll so surely vanish. So
come while you can,
and dine with me on clouds;
I'll watch you lap up reflections
in the midnight fog. I'll dance with your modesty,
and swim in your ecstacy.
If they should design for us: they being
the bestial sorcerers, then I,
In my fancy, will collect you
In fishing nets on the morrow.
3 comments
Comma after fields.
Period after lakeside.
Temove "so."
Replace the colon with a comma.
At least it makes more sense to me that way.
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