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When Gravity Unmakes You (Free verse) by Enkidu
You there, hovering above that fire! You fall so slowly! Why do you fight? What are you waiting for? The Devil can't stand your game. Who are you going to be When gravity unmakes you?

Up the ladder: Loving An Angel
Down the ladder: Tangled web.

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Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
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Arithmetic Mean: 3.3333333
Weighted score: 4.8013287
Overall Rank: 11115
Posted: August 3, 2006 12:48 PM PDT; Last modified: August 3, 2006 12:48 PM PDT
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Comments:
[0] Edna Sweetlove @ 81.178.69.4 | 3-Aug-06/4:35 PM | Reply
Total over-punctuated bollocks.
[n/a] Enkidu @ 172.191.51.24 > Edna Sweetlove | 3-Aug-06/4:42 PM | Reply
Something under your skin, Edna?
[10] Dovina @ 70.38.78.229 | 3-Aug-06/5:07 PM | Reply
The gravity image seems awkward in this setting, since gravity would drop the person rapidly into the fire. And why would the devil object to the "game"?

I'm voting 10 only to balance the obnoxious Edna.
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