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Free verse № 144970

When Gravity Unmakes You

by Enkidu

Member since 2004 · Posted 3 Aug 2006 · 3 comments

You there, hovering above that fire! You fall so slowly! Why do you fight? What are you waiting for? The Devil can't stand your game. Who are you going to be When gravity unmakes you?

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3 votes so far. Yours would make 4.3 votes so far

3 comments

[0] Edna Sweetlove 3-Aug-06/4:35 PM Reply
Total over-punctuated bollocks.
[n/a] Enkidu › Edna Sweetlove 3-Aug-06/4:42 PM Reply
Something under your skin, Edna?
[10] Dovina 3-Aug-06/5:07 PM Reply
The gravity image seems awkward in this setting, since gravity would drop the person rapidly into the fire. And why would the devil object to the "game"?

I'm voting 10 only to balance the obnoxious Edna.