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When Gravity Unmakes You (Free verse) by Enkidu You there, hovering above that fire!
You fall so slowly!
Why do you fight?
What are you waiting for?
The Devil can't stand your game.
Who are you going to be
When gravity unmakes you?
Up the ladder:
one true love (beta test)
Down the ladder:
Loving An Angel
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.3333333
Posted: August 3, 2006 12:48 PM PDT; Last modified: August 3, 2006 12:48 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.8013287 Overall Rank: 11128 Comments:
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Edna Sweetlove @ 81.178.69.4
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3-Aug-06/4:35 PM
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Total over-punctuated bollocks.
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Enkidu @ 172.191.51.24
> Edna Sweetlove
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3-Aug-06/4:42 PM
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Something under your skin, Edna?
The gravity image seems awkward in this setting, since gravity would drop the person rapidly into the fire. And why would the devil object to the "game"?
I'm voting 10 only to balance the obnoxious Edna. 137 view(s)
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