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When Gravity Unmakes You (Free verse) by Enkidu

You there, hovering above that fire! You fall so slowly! Why do you fight? What are you waiting for? The Devil can't stand your game. Who are you going to be When gravity unmakes you?

Dovina 3-Aug-06/5:07 PM
The gravity image seems awkward in this setting, since gravity would drop the person rapidly into the fire. And why would the devil object to the "game"?

I'm voting 10 only to balance the obnoxious Edna.




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