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TO MY SON on his 25th birthday (Free verse) by outdoorzylady TO MY SON ON HIS 25th BIRTHDAY
Sometimes I sit here and think about
what it would be like
if we could be together
without the past within our minds;
no baggage, not even the relationship
âMother and sonâ to bind.
Sometimes I sit here and imagine
what it would be like
to walk and talk together, and just be
friends, getting to know each other, having fun,
enjoying each otherâs company,
from old past ghosts set free.
I think we can know this kind of friendship,
I think we can if we try.
Please know this my son, don't forget it;
despite failures or wrongs I have done,
I respect and admire and cherish you so!
I see God's beauty in your gentle eyes.
And I love you, I love you, I love you, I love you
with all my heart I do!
Up the ladder:
All I Can Hear Is A Rattle
Down the ladder:
Beneath the Willow Tree
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Posted: July 29, 2006 5:49 PM PDT; Last modified: July 29, 2006 5:49 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.9525743 Overall Rank: 8882 Comments:
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Dovina @ 12.72.43.47
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30-Jul-06/3:59 PM
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I like the straightforward, no nonsense, presentation. While some may complain of poetic negligence, sincerity is there. For that Iâd give a 10. But since the poetry, for what little poetic excellence is really worth, is worth only a 5 in my opinion, have an 8. And enjoy your son.
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