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Always (Free verse) by freakything
Like the morning sun that will linger, and as the day will hatch a fever. My passion sits, patiently in its chair, with plenty of hours to spare. With hot sweaty palms clenching onto the thought of holding you. I wait, living with the same excitement and tune, for I know we will forever dance together, under every evening moon.

Up the ladder: razorblade kisses
Down the ladder: Life (the circle)

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.928861
Overall Rank: 9170
Posted: May 12, 2006 2:31 AM PDT; Last modified: May 12, 2006 2:31 AM PDT
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[7] Edna Sweetlove @ 85.210.184.228 | 16-May-06/12:36 PM | Reply
Quite nicely worded but more like prose broken up into arbitrary lines. Over-punctuated, I feel, with an excess of commas.
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