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Before Dinner (Free verse) by D. $ Fontera
The pestle is bone. The whisk, fingers. Balustrades tremble to my touch. The morter is flesh. Each dancing spot of flour Dusts your skin, Flutters with your breath Steps buckle and sway. My voice, a stifled burst. The pin turns a swathe. The cup, sweet lips. Smoke churns as I enter. The breadth extends. I hesitate, pierce the doorway.

Down the ladder: The One

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.5
Weighted score: 5.1788044
Overall Rank: 4947
Posted: May 5, 2006 10:56 AM PDT; Last modified: May 5, 2006 10:56 AM PDT
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[8] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 5-May-06/10:58 AM | Reply
I doubt dinner was on the menu.
[9] Dovina @ 17.255.240.138 | 5-May-06/7:41 PM | Reply
Morter and pestal, a short melding before dinner - how sweet. Pierce the doorway - how enticing. Yes.
[9] Niphredil @ 132.69.238.35 | 7-May-06/2:20 PM | Reply
Very nice, tres kinky :-) Although on the first read, I felt that 'bone' and 'fingers' were reminiscent of a skeleton. Not sexy!

BTW, "mortar", not "morter".
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