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Gale of Death (Paradelle)
The eyes of my existence shift,
The eyes of my existence shift,
To look in Hope's aborted breath,
To look in Hope's aborted breath.
Look to existence of the eyes,
Breath aborted in my Hope's shift.
A thunderous gale of Death returns,
A thunderous gale of Death returns,
To shadow me in solemn shrouds,
To shadow me in solemn shrouds.
Death to thunderous shadow of me,
Shrouds a gale in solemn returns.
Under starless skies I plead defense,
Under starless skies I plead defense,
And pronounce unsettled dark my muse,
And pronounce unsettled dark my muse.
I muse under unsettled starless dark,
Plead my skies and pronounce defense.
In shrouds of my gale breath,
Under Hope's muse I plead returns.
Solemn skies of dark and Death.
My unsettled eyes shift to existence,
Look to pronounce the starless shadow,
Aborted me in a thunderous defense.
2 comments
A Death of me in thunderous shrouds
Solemn gale returns to shadow
Or something like that.
Hee. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Paradelle
That said, some decent lines in this, but I don't think the form, the repetition for repetition's sake, adds anything to the poem. Also, while I like the wordplay to a point, sometimes the meaning is pretty fuzzy. Probably was fun though. ;)
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