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The great seven of Coloumbia the space ship (Free verse) by Dhanesh M Kumar
This seven went up the fore
to siege off beyond the bounties of earth;
seven seas and seven wonders
not enough to make it through,
as they do with, so easily,
more and enough for ordinary souls.
This seven went up the fore
to siege off beyond the bounties of earth;
seven capes and seven sages
not enough to make it through,
perhaps in pursuit of capes of ether
and sages among the numerous stars.
Oh ! the seven pearls of Coloumbia the ship
Who sailed beyond the seas of the earth;
we salute your spirits in heaven
though we are sure enough,
our tears and our words, so meek
For you remain as our shining stars.
This seven went up the fore
to siege off beyond the bounties of earth;
seven seas and seven wonders
not enough to make it through,
as they do with, so easily,
more and enough for ordinary souls.
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7953
Posted: March 9, 2006 7:58 PM PST; Last modified: March 9, 2006 7:58 PM PST
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I really like the talk of seven seas/wonders/capes/sages, and 'the seven pearls of Colombia' is a great line. So is 'perhaps in pursuit of capes of ether'.
Keep working at this one, it promises to be a really good poem!