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Time (Free verse) by sk8rs_rule_all If only it could turn back time, if only it could turn back time.
The hands of the clock are cruel and unloving.
The minutes on the hour don't care much what anyone else thinks, rudely
passing everyone by.
The seconds come and go without looking anyone in the eye.
The days just so by, flying away like the leaves on the ground.
Tick tock, tick tock.
Time waits for no man.
Up the ladder:
Are you my love?
Down the ladder:
bimby
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Posted: February 3, 2006 6:16 AM PST; Last modified: February 3, 2006 6:16 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.7019925 Overall Rank: 12007 Comments:
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Dovina @ 67.72.98.89
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3-Feb-06/7:09 AM
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misspellings, cliche in the last line. Do yoy mean "if only I" in the redundent first line?
My suggestion is don't put anything in a poem if you've already heard it before. That pretty much covers all poems about "Time".
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