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In my heart (Free verse) by Birdman42s In My Heart
Could I ever forget your sparkling eyes,
or the way you brightened each day,
or your smile which is etched in my memories,
So you are never far away?
Could I ever forget those priceless moments?
The answer of course is never.
For you were apart of my lift for a long time,
but you'll be apart of my heart forever.
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Posted: September 8, 2002 6:15 PM PDT; Last modified: September 8, 2002 6:15 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.4482355 Overall Rank: 2928 Comments:
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vulcan @ 80.242.3.96
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8-Sep-02/10:33 PM
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the 2 last sentences sound clumsy when read together.just a suggestion"and my heart's will be forever"or any way you like to cahange it.simple and tender.
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vulcan @ 80.242.3.96
> vulcan
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8-Sep-02/10:41 PM
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Sorry!forgot 'you' in my suggestion"and my heart's you'll be forever"
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