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In my heart (Free verse) by Birdman42s

In My Heart Could I ever forget your sparkling eyes, or the way you brightened each day, or your smile which is etched in my memories, So you are never far away? Could I ever forget those priceless moments? The answer of course is never. For you were apart of my lift for a long time, but you'll be apart of my heart forever. DLB

vulcan 8-Sep-02/10:33 PM
the 2 last sentences sound clumsy when read together.just a suggestion"and my heart's will be forever"or any way you like to cahange it.simple and tender.




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