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lip balm (Free verse) by FreeFormFixation a strawberry pachinko ball
bounces like a blueberry.
banana flavored cover-alls
are bad to wear by monkeys.
apple jelly handcuffs
keep a criminal trapped and healthy,
cheese-wigs are a bad idea
if mice live in your belfry.
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Posted: December 28, 2005 12:34 AM PST; Last modified: December 28, 2005 12:34 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.9205313 Overall Rank: 9520 Comments:
A strawberry bounces like a blueberry? That seems kind of sloppy.
"bad to wear by monkeys" needs rephrasing. Otherwise, good. 220 view(s)
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line 6 is out of synch... could omit 'trapped and'.
Cheese wigs is not a familiar term to me, so am supposing it is a bug??