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a strawberry pachinko ball bounces like a blueberry. banana flavored cover-alls are bad to wear by monkeys. apple jelly handcuffs keep a criminal trapped and healthy, cheese-wigs are a bad idea if mice live in your belfry.
zodiac
30-Dec-05/7:12 AM
A strawberry bounces like a blueberry? That seems kind of sloppy.
"bad to wear by monkeys" needs rephrasing. Otherwise, good.
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