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order of events (Free verse) by skaskowski
on her way to the liquor store: 1) she stepped over a dead rat next to a dumpster. 2) She dropped some pebbles down a sewage grate. 3) She found someone's overdue library book on the ground. 4) She saw 3 used needles. 5) She picked up 23 cents in small change. 6) She caught her backpack on a wire fence and ripped it. 7) She went to a liquor store. 8) She went home.

Up the ladder: Burnt
Down the ladder: Die tomorrow

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.75
Weighted score: 4.8509965
Overall Rank: 10547
Posted: December 28, 2005 12:24 AM PST; Last modified: December 28, 2005 12:24 AM PST
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[4] Sisterwolf @ 207.69.138.7 | 28-Dec-05/7:14 PM | Reply
Just a first thought I had... numbering detracts from
the power of your words. Need a capital S in first line. Repetitive she lends it a rhythm.
[7] zodiac @ 24.148.234.30 | 30-Dec-05/7:11 AM | Reply
Are you Amelie Poulain?
[n/a] skaskowski @ 70.225.165.248 > zodiac | 31-Dec-05/11:45 AM | Reply
no, but that's what we named our cat.
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