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Smile (Free verse) by feelinglistless When her face moved ?
her skin vibrated
in the wind.
His eyes
followed the edges
of her mouth
as they rose
and carried
her lips
into a smile.
It was
as though
he could
see each muscle
moving in
a well-rehearsed ballet,
where the silence
of captivation
was all
the music
that was
needed.
For a moment,
she was
the world
and all
within it ...
Up the ladder:
new year's eve
Down the ladder:
supply and remand
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Posted: May 10, 2002 12:39 PM PDT; Last modified: May 10, 2002 12:39 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.212706 Overall Rank: 13219 Comments:
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deleted user @ 64.12.103.183
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26-May-02/5:35 PM
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it was a little uniform, like it came from a romance novel. Didnt feel like a poem.
A bit cliched, but still nice!
Jill S. 262 view(s)
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