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Something New (Free verse) by feelinglistless
He reached out to touch her, nervously. Away, she pulled, from him, shielding. He spoke to her calmly. Screaming, her voice cracked. He smiled. She shouted. He ... She ... She reaches out to touch him, nervously. He holds out his hand and grips hers. She speaks to him calmly. Laughing, his voice cracks. She smiles. He weeps. She ... He ....
Up the ladder: Lossing Grip
Down the ladder: Epitome of Pathetic
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.769231
Weighted score: 4.831294
Overall Rank: 10825
Posted: May 10, 2002 12:38 PM PDT; Last modified: May 10, 2002 12:38 PM PDT
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[6] dilips_10 @ 203.197.190.98 | 30-Jun-02/3:07 AM | Reply
i can visualize that!!!
[6] Jill Stockinger @ 209.162.37.68 | 14-Jul-02/2:47 PM | Reply
Too similar to others I have read.
[10] rosebud @ 170.141.44.32 | 7-Aug-02/12:10 PM | Reply
This was a nice poem.
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