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Downside (Lyric) by Miggy
Last week you had that smile while dancing on the gym floor Now you left us shocked in your sentencing to the hospital And if you don’t know why you should go on furthermore I still have so much work to do I still have so much work to do You had your runs with two girls from different schools Now death knocks illusions so clearly that you jump into And if you still look for why we won’t let you I still have so much work to do I still have so much work to do There is so much ahead with all the twists and turns Sometimes things don’t go as planned and we feel the burn But the downside cannot outweigh the goodness that life offers So my brother, take a new step and find another lover Your lies had you gave would eventually take its toll Yet the punishment is more that you thought you could afford And if you’re still questioning if you are still alone I still have so much work to do I still have so much work to do There is so much ahead with all the twists and turns Sometimes things don’t go as planned and we feel the burn But the downside cannot outweigh the goodness that life offers So my brother, take a new step and find another lover Take this rhyme Spend those dimes None of it matters when you are sent up in your time Enjoy again Until the end Realize that even when being down does not mean you have a friend There is so much ahead with all the twists and turns Sometimes things don’t go as planned and we feel the burn But the downside cannot outweigh the goodness that life offers So my brother, take a new step and find another lover

Up the ladder: Void and Vitality
Down the ladder: 3AM At Whitey's

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10241
Posted: October 15, 2005 8:52 PM PDT; Last modified: October 15, 2005 8:52 PM PDT
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[n/a] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 | 16-Oct-05/5:12 AM | Reply
Lyrics better left unread: Most early Beetles songs.
Lyrics worth reading: Most later Beetles songs.
I can't seem to fit your poem in either category.
[2] Tintagiles @ 198.164.201.17 | 16-Oct-05/10:29 PM | Reply
'You had your runs with...' I'll take o'er -=Dark_Angel=-'s comment. Change to 'You had the runs because of' and it might be all right.
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