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The Sun (Free verse) by MacFrantic
The weary Sun, upon his bed, Laid to rest his blazing head. Underneath his solemn frown, Turned the cosmos upside-down Weeks and months, millenia passed. Years of sleep in shadows cast. All the Earth, devoid of light, Within a dark, eternal night. The Sun awoke, his Earth reborn, To bring a long, belated morn. Arrested fire, alone in space, Rose up again and showed his face.

Up the ladder: timebomb
Down the ladder: Ghostdancing

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.25
Weighted score: 5.2682066
Overall Rank: 3946
Posted: September 28, 2005 6:02 PM PDT; Last modified: September 28, 2005 6:02 PM PDT
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[n/a] ALChemy @ 65.188.89.69 | 30-Sep-05/8:20 AM | Reply
Couplet 4 is redundant and contradictory. (How the hell did you manage that?)

Why call it a free verse poem?

Kind of a good lullaby.
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