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Please Stay (Free verse) by pletcgm
It’s been a brief four months, Four months I wish was a lifetime. You gave me happiness, Happiness I have never felt. Knowing our time is slipping, My mind is in a trance. I have thought of nothing, Nothing but you. I have thought of the times, The times we spent together. All the times I looked at you, And my heart fluttered. Now, my heart is bleeding, Bleeding a river of love. It’s bleeding to the surface, All my feelings for you. As the final day approaches, I ask of you one last thing. Will you make my heart flutter again? Please stay

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10263
Posted: September 20, 2005 6:58 PM PDT; Last modified: September 20, 2005 6:58 PM PDT
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[2] Tintagiles @ 207.179.148.58 | 20-Sep-05/8:53 PM | Reply
Okay. You're not rhyming. That's good. 'Bleeding a river of love' -- if it's flowing out and you're not going to love again, sure. 'Will you make my heart flutter' -- medically speaking, that's not a very good request.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.151.147.145 | 22-Sep-05/4:37 PM | Reply
I probed your poeme with one of these: http://www.collectorman.com/images/S608.jpg , and it told me you were missing something in your life. Something, or someone... someone close to you. -10-
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