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CAN'T TAKE THE PAIN (Free verse) by prettyktm
Put your eyes on my face For the last time 'Cause I'm getting out of this maze Your love makes me feel low down And it hurts, I can't take the pain I was watching A late night show And the wall of our room Was changing colours I saw you through the corner of my eye You were not yourself And I know why? The words that you hide Were making your heart heavy Your love had vanish away from me And you can't look at me 'Cause you love somebody,besides me Well,if you think I'm gonna hold you And I'm gonna cry No,I'm too tried To do the same thing again 'Cause it's high time now And I can't take the pain.

Up the ladder: Destiny
Down the ladder: Forbidden Desires

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6666665
Weighted score: 5.1986713
Overall Rank: 4576
Posted: July 20, 2005 5:15 AM PDT; Last modified: July 20, 2005 5:15 AM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 20-Jul-05/7:43 AM | Reply
this makes a good Lyric.
[n/a] prettyktm @ 203.115.81.186 > <~> | 21-Jul-05/4:41 AM | Reply
thank you so much for your comment.
[n/a] prettyktm @ 203.115.81.186 > prettyktm | 21-Jul-05/4:42 AM | Reply
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.151.145.220 | 21-Jul-05/5:07 PM | Reply
This makes me sick. How dare you sully us with the lurid details of your dumpling of a love-life? This is a poetry website, and poetry is about thoughts, feelings, and emotions. Not tawdry 'late night' shows interspersed with teenage 'menages a trois.' Great poeme though :( -10-
[n/a] prettyktm @ 203.115.81.186 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 21-Jul-05/9:53 PM | Reply
Sorry for that,but love is not only the expression about love,ah
there are many other expression inculed in it.like.sadness,and I
have just wrote one of the expression of it.thank you for your ah
comment.take care.
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