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sad moments (Free verse) by rbooey
I wish that i could close my eyes And just drift off to sleep And find the place where happiness Is there for me to keep And everyone around me is A friend whom i will be Forever in thier company Because this place that we Are sleeping is called heaven Its a place where you can rest Forever, cos you go there For all time,not as a guest You leave what you were living In the past,so you can go And try to get away from What unhappiness you know And have a better future in A place you know will be Just full of love and happiness And death gives you the key.

Up the ladder: For my darling Lori
Down the ladder: Deep-Fried

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Weighted score: 4.193176
Overall Rank: 13222
Posted: July 6, 2005 7:10 PM PDT; Last modified: July 6, 2005 7:10 PM PDT
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[7] zodiac @ | 7-Jul-05/2:53 AM | Reply
Good luck to you. Personally, I imagine God being thoroughly Old Testament and all of us getting the fiery poker in the rump.
[n/a] rbooey @ > zodiac | 7-Jul-05/3:34 AM | Reply
i wasn't really thinking about god when i wrote it,and you're probably right about the poker.
[2] Sasha @ | 15-Aug-05/1:26 PM | Reply
Please, fix the misspellings. You don't have anything exciting or artful here, just a dull meditation on the afterlife. I have been forced to read many, many poems like this and smile indulgently at their authors and say "it's nice." Online, however, I have no compunction about telling you that this poem is worthless. I mean that as no offense, I'm just telling you what I think.
[4] nentwined @ > Sasha | 15-Feb-07/7:07 PM | Reply
Well said. :)
[4] nentwined @ | 15-Feb-07/7:07 PM | Reply
There is no happiness.
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