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sad moments (Free verse) by rbooey I wish that i could close my eyes
And just drift off to sleep
And find the place where happiness
Is there for me to keep
And everyone around me is
A friend whom i will be
Forever in thier company
Because this place that we
Are sleeping is called heaven
Its a place where you can rest
Forever, cos you go there
For all time,not as a guest
You leave what you were living
In the past,so you can go
And try to get away from
What unhappiness you know
And have a better future in
A place you know will be
Just full of love and happiness
And death gives you the key.
Up the ladder:
For my darling Lori
Down the ladder:
Deep-Fried
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Posted: July 6, 2005 7:10 PM PDT; Last modified: July 6, 2005 7:10 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.193176 Overall Rank: 13228 Comments:
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zodiac @ 86.108.11.226
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7-Jul-05/2:53 AM
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Good luck to you. Personally, I imagine God being thoroughly Old Testament and all of us getting the fiery poker in the rump.
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rbooey @ 82.42.64.158
> zodiac
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7-Jul-05/3:34 AM
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i wasn't really thinking about god when i wrote it,and you're probably right about the poker.
Please, fix the misspellings. You don't have anything exciting or artful here, just a dull meditation on the afterlife. I have been forced to read many, many poems like this and smile indulgently at their authors and say "it's nice." Online, however, I have no compunction about telling you that this poem is worthless. I mean that as no offense, I'm just telling you what I think.
Well said. :)
There is no happiness.
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