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sad moments (Free verse) by rbooey

I wish that i could close my eyes And just drift off to sleep And find the place where happiness Is there for me to keep And everyone around me is A friend whom i will be Forever in thier company Because this place that we Are sleeping is called heaven Its a place where you can rest Forever, cos you go there For all time,not as a guest You leave what you were living In the past,so you can go And try to get away from What unhappiness you know And have a better future in A place you know will be Just full of love and happiness And death gives you the key.

Sasha 15-Aug-05/1:26 PM
Please, fix the misspellings. You don't have anything exciting or artful here, just a dull meditation on the afterlife. I have been forced to read many, many poems like this and smile indulgently at their authors and say "it's nice." Online, however, I have no compunction about telling you that this poem is worthless. I mean that as no offense, I'm just telling you what I think.




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