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The Intellect Repeats (Villanelle) by Blue Magpie The intellect so often just repeats,
lines written while the higher mindâs asleep.
The spirit likes to play with thoughts it meets,
to lure them out across lifeâs clean white sheets
until they find a rhythm they can keep.
The intellect so often just repeats
the good, the bad, the tricksters and the treats,
âtil I, in thinking of it, wish to weep.
The spirit likes to play with thoughts it meets,
to dance with them on crowded city streets
or climb up mountain pathways harsh and steep.
The intellect so often just repeats,
in cinemas, to cold and empty seats,
the thoughts good poets never thought to keep.
The spirit likes to play with thoughts it meets
to urge them on to brave and daring feats,
such thoughts, as are by this made wise and deep,
the intellect so often just repeats.
The spirit likes to play with thoughts it meets.
Up the ladder:
forever it was you
Down the ladder:
caught amist
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Posted: June 26, 2005 10:33 PM PDT; Last modified: June 26, 2005 10:33 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.4482355 Overall Rank: 2962 Comments:
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Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 69.231.22.69
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27-Jun-05/12:23 AM
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villanelles are hard work. I even had to look up how to write a villanelle to check to see if you wrote a villanelle. Which you did. Yikes.
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Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.111
> Bankrupt_Word_Clerk
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27-Jun-05/7:51 PM
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You mean you really didn't notice that the previous poem I posted was a villanelle as well? Oh dear.
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Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 69.231.29.36
> Blue Magpie
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28-Jun-05/12:58 AM
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NO, I really didn't notice. Too caught up in myself, I suppose. But I noticed this one, and liked it more.
I like this one. Rapped from between clenched teeth.
>>such thoughts, as are by this made wise and deep<< The only line that made me stagger. Literally, I mean. The grammar seems rather forced to me.
It's hard to do a treatise in a villanelle. Stories work better. Here, I think that for the sake of form, you have diminished the value of intellect way too much.
You are quite probably correct, albeit it does to some extent depend on whose intellect is under discussion. How about
The conscious mind ............... or The villanelle .................... It has been reworked a bit, I will look up the older ideas when I don't have to be somewhere at 6.30am (which is half an hour away. 218 view(s)
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