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sixth and highland (Haiku) by unknown^user I watch the birds
from my window
fly to buildings
Only one
falls behind
never more
I watch the people
time losing its name
staring at hand signs
Up the ladder:
Underground Pipes
Down the ladder:
Never to Part
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Posted: May 3, 2005 2:29 PM PDT; Last modified: May 12, 2005 8:48 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.762871 Overall Rank: 11532 Comments:
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Dovina @ 69.175.32.185
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12-May-05/12:14 PM
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I don't get it.
A haiku goes 5-7-5 and is an observation of nature, a theme you altogether loose in the last stanza. No problem with me, but call it a free haiku then, or something like that.
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