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Beating heart

Member since 2004 · Posted 9 Feb 2005 · Edited 9 Feb 2005 · 2 comments

beating soundly counting measures my heart throbbs too stay alive it skips a stroke now and then time comes and goes with the beat but for when the time comes rythmic beats all must fade often it brings a tear.

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[10] deleted user 9-Feb-05/6:55 PM Reply

hey this is really meaningfull

[5] Dovina 10-Feb-05/8:04 AM Reply

Good up through line 3, except for spelling. After that it gets trite.