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Beating heart (Free verse) by celticskatermatt1

beating soundly counting measures my heart throbbs too stay alive it skips a stroke now and then time comes and goes with the beat but for when the time comes rythmic beats all must fade often it brings a tear.

Dovina 10-Feb-05/8:04 AM
Good up through line 3, except for spelling. After that it gets trite.




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