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remember me (Free verse) by Katie
Remember me, When you feel a light breeze standing by the side of the sea, Remember me, when you see someone who resembles me, Remember me, When the suns warm raise shines upon your face. I"m the, Shadow down a dark ally, I'm the, Glimpse oyu caught out of the corner of your eye, I'm the Tickle down your spine. I am your past, She is your future, Don't forget about us, And all our fun, It surley was a balst while it lasted, time to move on, as time flys by. Who know's maybe one day our paths will cross, but for us, it's a loss cause.

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 6.0
Overall Rank: 1289
Posted: August 28, 2002 3:52 PM PDT; Last modified: August 28, 2002 3:52 PM PDT
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[9] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 28-Aug-02/5:21 PM | Reply
dig the typos purpose, and false child banter! you pass! at what? deviled egging.19/10
[7] dragonfly @ 209.239.202.62 | 5-Sep-02/2:29 PM | Reply
I love the line "I'm the Glimpse you caught out of the corner of your eye." I liked the structure of your poem as well, but there were far too many typos and other mechanical errors.
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