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Point Blank (Prose Poem) by jroday It's Christmas time now, so should we sing songs of peace on earth just
because that's what we were taught?
Was the commercialization of Jesus's birth at the heart of all those
wars this nation fought?
How many jobs will be lost on New Years Day?
Well that's just some food for thought.
What's going on in the killing field brother John?
Why is it legal to poison the youth's minds with the simple ass
materialism being spit in many rap songs?
Could It be the world has lost It's way?
Could It be the decimation of right is at hand?
This nation stands by all that is wrong.
The war in Iraqi is not about oil, It's about the Holy Koran.
Black people think Jesus was black and White people think that Jesus was
white; look at the paintings.
But if he returns as a Hebrew, He's going to be harassed if
he tries to get on any U.S. bond flight.
WE THE PEOPLE OF THE UNITED STATES OF AMERICA
HAVE BEEN FIGHTING A WAR IN OUR COUNTRY FOR YEARS AND YEARS
AND ITS NOT BLACK AND WHITE.
IT'S DRUGS,POVERTY,GANGES,TRYING TO SAVE OUR CHILDREN.
JRODAY AUG 28,1956-UNTIL THEN
Up the ladder:
Missing Grand Miss.
Down the ladder:
Don't Ask, Don't Tell
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Posted: January 2, 2005 4:53 AM PST; Last modified: January 2, 2005 4:53 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.2145653 Overall Rank: 4369 Comments:
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This is my first time trying to write a "Prose Poem"
Not a particularly incisive analysis. Poems need to be more subtle and crafted. The only poem I see here is the bit where jesus comes down as a jew and everyone is suspicious of him. Also don't use caps they are the most artless device of communication ever.
Thank you richa for your advice, the next time I'll try to do better.
My wish is that we would allow this planet to be the
beautiful oasis that she is, and allow ourselves to live more in the peace that she generates.
To answer your first question: I did. I sang them because I was taught, and I still think my parents were right to teach them. They said their world was going to the dogs, and it wasn't near as bad as mine in regard to the moral issues they and you are complaining about. Still I sing Peace on Earth, Good Will to Men, because it's right and they were right and you are right if you don't lose faith. UNTIL THEN.
That's why you are my internet inspiration, you keep it real.
UNTIL THEN. 233 view(s)
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